Alright, your style is good. However you're just a little out of character, and I don't know why you started in first person... but I guess you have your reasons. Not bad.

[quote="Cool_Shan":94e47] Ooh. Please dont stop reading. It will get better the only reason i didnt bother with description like that is coz i was tired when i posted it and couldn't think of anything else. I PROMISE IT WILL GET BETTER!!! [/quote:94e47] READ MORE! Read some books. Read Dea...

The boys had a look of horror on their faces, they felt deeply worried and scared. AAAAHHHHH!!!!! IT RAKES AGAINST MY EARS!!!!!! No no no no, you need to STOP right there. That is the first line that I have read in this story (to find out what I want to read, I read something in the middle, just ho...

Ah, memories

Why must you plague us with such useless crap?! Get off the fan fic board!!!

I'll try and read more and enter them in soon.

He didn't wear his red coat that morning. He simply slipped off into the night, his feet were bare and his pajamas were thin but he didn't mind. Over the dunes of snow he walked toward the mountains, but he did not intend to stop there. Something beyond there was calling for him. Something else was ...

Yeah, someone call a locksmith!

yeah dude, Sober up.

Carry on, Soldier.

I hope no one minds if I bring this beauty back to life.

Interesting method that is. Just remember that if you only post one chapter, don't beat yourself up about it. I use to post three chapters of a story I wrote, finished it in three days. Not a very good one but whateva. And I have been without internet for quite some time. Come on AIM, we can chat! A...

Ah, so good to see that my legacy of Fan Fiction on this site is still not in vein. Very nice to see such dedication to the writing world even when I've been gone for a year. I have not forgotten you guys, I've just been without the internet for a long long time. I'm in the real world living on my ...

....that is not only a BAD episode, it is also grossly unoriginal. You fail.

I'd rather you not. Please just ask someone to make you a sig. Thanks for asking though.