South Park Elementary Massacre (my first fan fic, be gentle)

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Postby andrewgibson » Tue Jun 27, 2006 12:15 am

arent i funny? :lol:
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Postby Kyle the Skeptic » Tue Jun 27, 2006 1:12 am

Hey another chapter! Well it's about damn time!

I mean good job. :D
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Postby PsychoMetroid 3:16 » Tue Jun 27, 2006 3:38 pm

This is really good. I wasn't expecting that, I thought it was Garrison.
Anyway, it was well worth the wait.
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Postby master ed » Tue Jun 27, 2006 5:02 pm

very good K_M.
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Postby crazyQH » Tue Jun 27, 2006 10:42 pm

Very good, I can't wait for the next chapter! :D
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Postby Cartman_91 » Tue Jun 27, 2006 10:43 pm

Great, I had a feeling the killer would be Kenny but wasn't sure
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Postby Kelly MacCornmac » Tue Jun 27, 2006 11:43 pm

Holy sh*t...I thought it was going to be him...but you kinda made it clear that he was not there. 0_0 my first fic had him killing too....
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Postby danielprive6 » Wed Jun 28, 2006 1:59 am

i had a really weird feeling in my stomach telling me that you where going to make the killer danielprive6 and embaresse me. id like to thank you for not doing this
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Postby andrewgibson » Wed Jun 28, 2006 2:05 am

GROUP HUG! :)
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Postby Gothic_Butters » Fri Jun 30, 2006 8:01 am

Sorry, guys but we can't give away the ending! (KM and I are working on this together to make this super sweet)
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Postby cartman8213 » Fri Jun 30, 2006 9:12 pm

danielprive6 wrote:i had a really weird feeling in my stomach telling me that you where going to make the killer danielprive6 and embaresse me. id like to thank you for not doing this

He's had the whole thing planned since he started. He wouldn't think of putting a board member in a fanfic.
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Postby Kyle's_Marklar » Sat Jul 01, 2006 4:52 am

Chapter 15: The Aftermath

(Kyle is lying on a bed with the Broflovskis sitting around him. He slowly starts opening his eyes.)

Ike: Ky…

(Ike tugs on his mom’s shirt and points to Kyle.)

Mrs. Broflovski: Bubby!

(Sheila Broflovski embraces her son who lays there, perplexed.)

Mr. Broflovski: You’re up!

Kyle: Wha… what happened?

Mrs. Broflovski: Oh baby, why didn’t you tell us?

Kyle: Tell you what?

Mrs. Broflovski: You know what.

Kyle: No, I really don’t… Where am I?

(Just then, a female nurse walks in.)

Nurse: Hells Pass Hospital. How are you feeling?

Kyle: I’m good… I guess… but why am I here?

Nurse: You were found lying outside your school…

Mr. Broflovski: Why didn’t you tell us, Kyle? Why didn’t you tell us you were thinking of suicide?

Kyle: What!

Mr. Broflovski: You jumped out the window… of your school. Don’t you remember?

Kyle: I do remember… Kenny! Where’s Kenny?

Mrs. Broflovski: One of your little friends? Well, why do you need him?

Kyle: He was the killer!

Mr: Broflovski: Killer?

Mrs. Broflovski: Oh dear. You better get some rest.

Nurse: Maybe I can shed some light on this, Mrs. Broflovski. Let’s leave him alone with his thoughts.

(The nurse, Mr. Broflovski, Mrs. Broflovski and Ike step outside and close the door behind them, leaving Kyle alone to ponder what happened in the school. Outside of the room, the nurse explains to the Broflovskis what the police found in the school. In a few minutes, they return.)

Mrs. Broflovski: Oh my God, Kyle. I had no idea.

(She embraces her son once more.)

Kyle: You know about it?

Nurse: Yes. Six bodies were found in the school. Why didn’t you tell us… why didn’t you contact us?

Kyle: Six bodies?!? There’s supposed to be seven.

Nurse: Who else was supposed to be there?

Kyle: Token, Tweek, Butters, Clyde, Cartman, Stan and Kenny were all in the school when I got out.

Nurse: Hmm… I’ll see if I can find out any more information. If you want to visit your friend, he’s in room 2C on the 2nd floor.

Kyle: My… friend? Who?

Nurse: The only other survivor. I believe his name is… Stanley Marsh.

Kyle: Stan’s alive?!?

Nurse: Yes, apparently so. He was found with a rather large stab wound but luckily, no vital organs were hit. It’s lucky we got to him in time.

Kyle: Can I go see him now?

Nurse: Not quite yet but I’ll inform you when you can.

(Several minutes later, a detective wearing a dark suit comes in and sits beside Kyle.)

Detective: How are you feeling?

Kyle: I’m o.k.

Detective: Now, can you tell me what happened.

(Kyle explains all he can remember.)

Detective: So you say your friend Kenny McCormick was behind all this?

Kyle: Yea…

Detective: Do you have any idea where he is?

Kyle: No.

Detective: Well, thank you for the help. Get well soon, kid.

(And with that, the detective runs out the door and Kyle remains in the room.)

(Despite being physically healthy, Kyle remains at the hospital, mostly to keep Stan compay who is still too weak to even get up and also to get treatment from psychologist, Mr. Mackey. One day, the nurse approaches Kyle and informs him about Kenny's problem.)

Nurse: Hello Kyle. I'm here to talk about your friend, Kenny McCormick. (she sits down besides Kyle) You see... he had a disorder… where he had two different personalities.

Kyle: What do you mean?

Nurse: He had a split personality. He used to take medication to control it but recently, according to his parents, he had stopped.

Kyle: His parents just let him stop taking it?

Nurse: According to them, they didn’t know. So that wasn’t Kenny who attacked you. It wasn’t him at all.

Kyle: Why didn’t he ever tell me?

Nurse: I don't imagine he'd be particularly proud about it.

(Weeks and weeks pass until Stan gets better and the two best friends leave the hospital just in time for the funeral.)

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(Stan limps to a microphone at the funeral. Hundreds of people are here, mourning the death of 5 children.)

Stan: We often wonder… Why does a fair, loving God allow for such terrible things to happen. Maybe… He does it to get us to recognize how lucky we are to be here. Maybe I’ve taken life for granted before… but not now… not after this. We must remember to appreciate the little things because they can be taken away in an instant. Tweek Tweak, Leopald Stotch, Token Williams, Clyde Goodman and Eric Cartman… forever in our hearts. Rest in peace.

(In the very back, a blonde boy in a blue suit is leaning against a tree with tears coming down his eyes. He listens to the speech and once it ends, he picks up a small bag full of clothing, whispers "I'm sorry" to no one in particular and goes down the trail, never to return to South Park.)

The End.

I wanna thank Gothic_Butters for helping me out with this last chapter. I also wanna thank Satan. Without him, I would imagine God would be very bored. Everyone wants to feel important, even God. So thanks and I hope you enjoyed it!
Last edited by Kyle's_Marklar on Sat Jul 01, 2006 5:36 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Postby SugarCrazy1 » Sat Jul 01, 2006 5:08 am

:shock:
Whoa.
K_M, I loved the ending! *golf claps*

I hope you keep writing in the future.
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Postby Gothic_Butters » Sat Jul 01, 2006 6:07 am

I'm grateful this turned out the way it did in the last chapter. You wrote it very well, and put my ideas in it approitally. Let's give ourselfs a round of applause, but who needs to be recignized here is you. You did most of the work here! Congratulations. Awesome job!


South Park Elementary Massacre.
Written by: Kyle's_Markler
Co-Writer, Chapter 15: Gothic_Butters.

I also wanna thank the fans who gave both him and I the support on this fanfic!
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Postby bugzbunnie6 » Sat Jul 01, 2006 6:36 am

Wonderful fanfic!! That was one of the best that I've ever read!! And it was so suspensful! I'll admit, I teared up when I read that Stan had survived... I'm just like that. Anyways, K_M, you're a great writer. I hope you keep up your fanfiction, you could write some great stories in the future. :D

Once again, wonderful fanfic. I absolutely loved it.
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