Kyle Broflovski walked home from school, alone. Stan and Kenny were sick at home and Cartman was out of town. He looked up into the sky to see strange colors coming from Stan’s house, he panicked and ran. He busted into Stan’s house and searched all around the house, and ran into the yard, to find Stan and Kenny screaming their hats off. Kyle stared, in the middle of the yard there was a portal from what seemed to be a time machine. Stan got sucked into it first, then Kenny was flown in. Kyle screamed. He was thrown into the air and sucked into the portal. It was swirl of colors and filled with twists and turns. He fell onto hard stone floor, next to a unconscious Kenny. He got up.
Kyle: Stan? Stan, were are you? Kenny? Kenny! Wake up wake up!
Stan: Kyle? Over here!
Kyle: Were the hell are we? And what the f** is up with that machine thing?
Stan: Me and Kenny built a time machine with help from those two dorks who live next door to you. We didn’t think it would work. But it did!
Kenny: Oh my head, holy s** my hood! [he puts it back on]
Kyle: Where are we?
Stan: It looks like the mall, but why are there flying cars?
Kyle: Future. It’s the year 2078! Look! [He points at the sign, which reads “South Park is happy to say that it’s the year 2078! HAPPY NEW YEAR!]
Kenny: Oh my god, we are in the future.
Stan: You bastards!
Kyle: You guys look, its Stan from the future.
He pointed at a man with the same red and blue poofball hat, with a black coat and blue pants. Young Stan stared.
Kyle: Haha, Hey STAN!
Older Stan: Huh, who’s calling me? Hey little dude’s, you look just like my old friends. You with the green hat, you look like my friend Kyle Broflovski! But he’s dead now.
Kyle: WHAT!? I am Kyle Broflovski, from the past. That’s Kenny McCormick, you remember him? And that’s Stan.
Older Stan: Dude.
Young Stan: Hey older me.
Kyle: What happened to me?
Older Stan: Ok little dudes, time for a story. [They sat down on a floating bench.]
Older Stan: 60 years ago today, Kyle and Cartman… [Flashback to the boys teenage days]
Teenage Stan: Hey guys, ready for the first day of high school at South Park High?
Teenage Kyle: Sure am Stan. Hey Kenny , Hey fatass.
Teenage Cartman: Shut Up Kyle, I swear I’m going to kill you one of these days.
Teenage Kyle: Oh please, you always say that and never to it.
Teenage Kenny: Seriously.
Teenage Cartman: Oh really? [Takes out a gun and shots Kyle]
[End of Flashback]
Older Stan:…And that’s how Cartman killed Kyle. He’s still in jail.
The boys sat there with their mouths hanging open.
Kyle: The fat bastard. The fat BASTARD!
Kenny: Wait, if Cartman killed you in the future, how come you haven’t disappeared?
Stan: Because it’s in the FUTURE.
Kenny: Oh. But we ARE in the future.
Stan: Hey, Kenny’s right, we are in the future, Kyle why haven’t you disappeared?
Kyle: I don’t know.
Camera leaves the mall to Future Denver, were Future Kyle is sleeping in an ally. A gun wound in his leg.
Like it so far? So it's not PG-13 yet but wait for chapter 2.
EDIT: I just read it, and I am happy to say it isn't really similar to the story I am working on. But, so far this isn't bad.
A little constructive criticism: It seems a little rushed. Don't be afraid of details, as long as they aren't irrelevant and monotonous. And, I always seem to point this out: Don't be so blunt with what the characters are saying. By that I mean, don't just have them say "Me and Kenny invented a time machine" or "Hey look, it's me from the future," without him evoking any emotion. Not to mention, I doubt he'd be able to come to the instant conclusion that old man was him from the future, he'd probably be pretty skeptical.
Also, if the year is 2078, then that would make them pretty damn old. If they were in highschool, it would be about 60 years from that date, not 10. And why would young Kyle disappear if he were in the future, it wouldn't be him that disappeared because he's still young even though he is in the future. And, how could teenage Kyle be lying in the ally if they are past their teenage years?
WWIII) Teenage Kyle survived the gun shot to the leg, though he fell into an instant coma, the doctors at that time were retards.
Old Wendy: THANKS TOM! WELL PRESIDENT McCORMICK ANNOUNCED TODAY THAT HE IS DEFINATLY BANNING PARKAS. BACK TO YOU TOMMY AND I’LL SEE AT HOME TONIGHT SO WE CAN HAVE MORE…psssnyttt (TV cuts Wendy off)
Reporter: Thank you Wendy.
Nevermnid, got more ideas.
Once you get the hang of it then you will be able to translate good ideas into writing at a faster pace than when you started. But please don't rush it, nobody likes reading something that has obviously been written in a hurry.
im writing a time machine story to if you want ideas...
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