Kyle Dies - The Final Chapter

[Kyle the Skeptic]

Well, since people are still reading this, I've gone back and made the corrections I had come up with to this version of it as well. I've corrected the grammar on the chapters where I wasn't able to get a beta-reader, and I made sure the doctor's name is spelled correctly.

And thanks for the reviews.

[O'Brien]

I found this story to be a good read. In particular I liked how you made those Goth kids actually care for their own, essentially humanizing them so that they're more than mere sterotypes. The main boys were all well-done too. My only tiny gripe is that I had to read the reference post to figure out who Carl and Isaac were, but that's no biggie really. So good job.

[Cartmansgurl15]

Holy sh*t! That was awesome! I am working on my own fan fic and I think that was super-ultra sweet! Dude, you got talent. Write more stories!

[Grizim]

I read it again, paying closer attention to it this time. Generally an impressive fanfic. I can write stories, but not fan fiction because I can't adapt to styles very well, or at least not as well as this. It truly deserves a solid 10/10.

Not to sound too show-offy with music theory, but you can't strum chords on a bass guitar. You should change "chords" to "notes". I know, it's a very minor problem that I'm picking at, but I have OCD so I tend to magnify little things like this.

[Kyle the Skeptic]

No problem. I've gone back and edited chapters 7 and 8.

[OMGTKKauthoritah]

Um, actually, you can strum chords on the bass. It's just not too common. It's been done by Cannibal Corpse before. The late Cliff Burton of Metallica did it too. And I have definitely heard Suffocation's bassist playing chords in one of their songs.

In fact, here's a section of a bass tab for Suffocation's "Tomes of Acrimony" to prove it.

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                                                         1.
    W          Q  H    E E   W          Q  H    S E.
||-----------|-------------|----------|----------------||
||o----------|-9-----------|----------|-9-------------o||
||o----------|-7-----------|----------|-7-------------o||
||--0--------|-0-------0-0-|-0--------|-0-------0-0----||


  2.
  Q  H    Q
|--------------|
|-9------------|
|-7------------|
|-0-------0----|

And have I reviewed this one yet? Well, in case I haven't, I really like this one a lot. This seems to have been your first novelized fic, and you pulled it off excellently. 10/10.

[Grizim]

I knew Metallica did it, but there aren't enough good-sounding bass chords to construct the entire "I'm A Jew" song, especially without any overdrive (and I don't know why the hell someone would use overdrive to play a song like "I'm A Jew") and as you said, it's very uncommon. Almost as uncommon as putting tape on a harmonica and playing it that way (LOL, even though I'm guilty for doing it for fun).

[Kenny914]

Your fanfic is so great. It is the first fanfic I ever read. I am also glad there are some Kyle fans out there other than me. I give your fanfic a 10 out of 10. And for a idea for another fan fic here is a idia. Cartman finds out that somehow he is Jewish. I dont care if you use is(infact I would like you to make a fanfic of it because I cant wright fanfics).





Kenny914

[Kyle the Skeptic]

Thanks for the review. However the idea you mentioned has already been suggested hundreds of times and done to death.

[Kenny914]

Damit why cant I ever come up with original ideas.

[!Kristen!]

Wow... just wow. This is definately one of my favourites, I've read it three times now. It's so good, very, very well done!

[S-O-U-T-H-P-A-R-K]

Nice story

[Kyle the Skeptic]

Hey, thanks! I didn't know people were still reading this.

[stanandkylefan]

Awesome. :]

yeah that was awesome

[Nommel]

*insert sycophantic compliment here*