Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby south park fan collecter » Sat Nov 24, 2007 8:48 pm

do you know any other channles they give south park ximena949.
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby SouthPark_Girl » Sat Nov 24, 2007 9:25 pm

south park fan collecter wrote:do you know any other channles they give south park ximena949.


i like you dude. but for the love of god please post if you have a REAL reply :!: :|
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby south park fan collecter » Sat Nov 24, 2007 9:28 pm

cheesypoofs876 is being mean to me.
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby SouthPark_Girl » Sat Nov 24, 2007 9:33 pm

south park fan collecter wrote:cheesypoofs876 is being mean to me.



Really? but shes really nice. Where you bugging her or somting?
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby south park fan collecter » Sat Nov 24, 2007 9:36 pm

becuse i was with a avatar with native american clothes and she said f*cking white people and i was with that avatar becuse my dad is from ecuador .
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby SouthPark_Girl » Sat Nov 24, 2007 9:43 pm

south park fan collecter wrote:becuse i was with a avatar with native american clothes and she said f*cking white people and i was with that avatar becuse my dad is from ecuador .



oh. Shes nice. I like your Avatar :wink:
Nice beer jug :lol:
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby south park fan collecter » Sat Nov 24, 2007 9:44 pm

no she said shut the f*ck up to me.
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby SouthPark_Girl » Sat Nov 24, 2007 10:27 pm

south park fan collecter wrote:no she said shut the f*ck up to me.



Sweetie, if you know your not those things she said about you arnt true then enjoy this site. If you believer them then shes the one who wins. But personally shes a nice person to me so i like her. Hope you feel better dude.
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby Pip303 » Sun Nov 25, 2007 12:08 am

Awww does Kyle have to be in love with Kelsey? lol anyway, I love the story! so cool! keep going! :)
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby SouthPark_Girl » Sun Nov 25, 2007 3:54 am

Pip303 wrote:Awww does Kyle have to be in love with Kelsey? lol anyway, I love the story! so cool! keep going! :)


You and ximena are like the only people who actually replied :lol: I'm going to post the 4th part tomorrow :D :wink: i thought i was going to get bad replies.... :cry: but i didnt so 8) :mrgreen:
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby Pip303 » Sun Nov 25, 2007 4:01 am

SouthPark_Girl wrote:
Pip303 wrote:Awww does Kyle have to be in love with Kelsey? lol anyway, I love the story! so cool! keep going! :)


You and ximena are like the only people who actually replied :lol: I'm going to post the 4th part tomorrow :D :wink: i thought i was going to get bad replies.... :cry: but i didnt so 8) :mrgreen:


Nah, your story's too good to get bad replies :D
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby Edduyasha » Sun Nov 25, 2007 4:36 am

The story is pretty decent for a first; the grammar, spelling, and syntax (sentence structure) could use some work, though. The story in itself is pretty intresting, to say the least. The references to the different episodes are intresting to see, but I'd be careful with your OC (original character); I'd try to stay away from Mary-Sueism (Google it, I'm not too sure myself how to explain it). Overall, it's coming along well enough.

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Goodbye, cruel world...
I'm leaving you today
Goodbye, goodbye, goodbye...

Goodbye, all you people
There's nothing you can say
To make me change my mind...
Goodbye...


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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby polymorph » Sun Nov 25, 2007 5:47 am

Good story. is going a little fast for my taste but that's not something to worry about. The mary sue thing might be a problem however so watch out for that.
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby SouthPark_Girl » Sun Nov 25, 2007 10:11 pm

Part 4- One gone two too go
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Kyle is full of Anger and willing to fight at that point of time so they rushed out the front door, but right before they close the door

Sheila: "Bobey, where do you think your going?"
She said from the top of the stairs.

Kyle: "Mom, i haven't to help them. Kelsey's in big trouble!"
Shelia: "Well, i don't know bulli?"
Kyle: "Fine i don't need your permission you bitch!"
Kyle slams the door.
Shelia: "Wha-Wha-WHAT!?"
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11:45 PM

Kenny: "Wow, Kyle when you get back home your going to get it."
Kyle didn't even hear Kenny say that sentence because he was glaring at Kelsey. Everything turned pink and in slow motion as Kelsey's hair slowly twirled in the wind.

Kenny: DUDE! Kyle whats the matter?"

Kyle looks down at he's shoes. And whispered to himself

Kyle: "Just... friends."

Kenny: "Are you sure your alright dude?"
Kyle: "I'm fine."
He says with the worst fake smile in the world.

As they were walking down the street they started to hear voices and rattles from the bushes.

Kelsey: "Who's there!?"

Kenny: "I think our minds our playing tricks on us because we haven't liked... sleeped in two days."

Kelsey: "I guess your right."

From out in the bushes leaped out a kid with a black ski mask and a nice Italian suit. the kid wasn't fat. He was really tall and skinny.

Kyle: "Who the f*ck are you!?"

The dude takes Kenny and disappears into the night.
Kelsey: "KENNY!"
She starts to cry.

Kelsey: "Oh my god! there going to kill him! all because of me!"
She starts to wail more.

Kyle: "Kelsey! Its not your fault! well go get Kenny back."

Kyle wipes her tears off with he's cold hand onto Kelsey's warm, clear face.

Kelsey: "Why are you being so nice to me?"

Kyle: "Because. I'm a nice person. And... and... i don't think i can just stay Friends"

Kelsey: "I don't understand.."

Kyle: "I know you don't.."
He then walks ahead of her.
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The restraunt
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Kelsey: "I think we should back off Kyle, cause who's going to be the distraction sense Kenny's gone????

Kyle thought that as well, who was going to be the distraction??? he thought in he's mind with he's teeth biting one of he's knuckles. Kyle turns to the other side to see Butters.

Butters happily skipped, and sang down the wet sidewalks of Downtown South Park.

Butters: "Lo.Lo.Lo. Ive got some apples. Lo. Lo. Lo. You've got some too. Lo. Lo. Lo. Lets make some applesauce. Take of our clothes and lo lo lo.

Kyle: "Butters!"
He said yelling but whispering at the same time.

Butters: "Oh. Hi Kyle!"

Kyle: "Butters, we need a big favor."

Butters: "Sure, i love helping people! so what can i do for you guys?"
he said with a bright, positive look on he's face.

Kyle: "Okay Butters, all you haft to do is keep that one kid in there distracted so Kelsey.

Kelsey waves at butters.

Kyle: "Me and her Can go in with out being seen, do you think you can do this butters?"

Butters: " We'll okay.."

Butters walks into the restraunt to find the fat little mafia kid staring him right in the eyes.

Luogi: "What is it that you want from me? money? Girls?"

Butters: "Oh heavens no i..... i.... just wanted to talk to you..."

Luogi: " i don't believe that.."
Butters put he's knuckles together nervously.

Luogi: "Would you care for some spaghetti?

Butters: "Uh, sure."

He takes a seat from across Luogi and looks at the red and white checkered table patterns.
Kyle and Kelsey sneak in, with no problems and they ran into a very dark corner.
They finally sneak right in the back of Luogi and there, Eric Cartman poped right out from somewhere mysteriously and triggered a gun right to Kyle's head.
Kyle: "Oh sh*t dude!"
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To be continued....
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Re: Remake of "Kenny's Crush episode 1"

Postby Pip303 » Sun Nov 25, 2007 10:36 pm

Wow dude, superb! keep going, this stories getting really good! :P
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